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Amazing! I have so many ideas spinning around in my head now...This truly was a great introduction to the Blackwater experiments. Since this ends on such a cliffhanger, I hope there is more to come!

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Oh, heck yeah! I will make a part two at minimum. I know Scoot was struggling against a 9 part serial. I hope he lost the battle and will be producing a sweeping epic. A spidering web of content in a world like this would be amazing. I can't wait to read yours!

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SO excited! I don't know how anyone is able to plan out their serial in parts. I mean, I do, but it's just something I don't think I am capable of. My stories tend to run wild until I feel they are complete. I hope he does ditch the 9 part serial and go for a much longer piece! My blackwater idea is leading me more towards several entries to be honest.

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Everyone’s different! You have a good, natural sense for a story, so it would make sense not to need a plan!

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GAH THERE'S SO MUCH GOING ON HERE. Excellent concepts and details and they give some context to the ideas I already had swimming around. Undertow, Riptide, etc etc--EXCELLENT imagery. Mental training/grounding/manifestation--AWESOME. This is a GREAT start and I can't wait to read more! Well done!

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Thank you so much! I’m super excited to see what you’ve got too! I’m glad that you feel it’s going to flow (haha) well!

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Holy smokes that was so good! Like what the heck! The rabbits the... thing.... geez all the details, this was amaze balls! I can’t wait to read more 🤯

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Thank you! I’m always so impressed with your work, it means a lot coming from you

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🥹☺️

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Ahhh! This is gonna be good. Ş̸͇͕̰̝̯͚͖̺̱̺͌̓Ḩ̵̞̳̜̫͉̝̻͇̬̲̫̟̯̣͊͗̾̌͆R̷̨̢̛̞̙̝̬̰̳͓̮̱̦͔̞̩̬̋̅̀͋͗̊̒͗͐̔̓̇ͅI̵̛͙̣̟͓̗̹͎̜͕̼̩̬̯̾̊̂̍̂͆́̄̚͜͜ͅM̴̤̘̖̓́̈́̌̚P̴̡̛̯̠͍̱͓̪̰̹̭̟̹̦̌̂̉̀̔̊̐̓̃̈́̇̀̚͘͝ ̴͓̬̩̍̈́̉͐́̓̃͗̇̍̚̚͝C̶̨̛͙̼̭̲͔̗͐̑̋̀̆̀͒̕R̴̫̘̰͖͋͊̾̈́̑̔͆̈́̉̏̔̊̋̚̚͝͝I̸͍̞̾̈̇̒͆̃͌́̑͗̉̑͒͝͝Ś̷̝͖̤̘̳̘̹͍̑̑̂̋͊͑̆P̶̡͕͉͚̖̮̜̹͈̥̞̹̬̳̪̓̓͌̓͛̏̑̃̃̊̔͋̚̕ͅͅS̷̢̨̡̳̝̩͍̝̣̭͖̓͒͂̋̊͝!̸̨̢̠͔͚̜͇͖̼͓̘͖͍̥̊̀̑̀̋͊̈́̈́̓̐̾͋̕͝

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Oh yes i've seen them: https://ibb.co/FgwgPkv

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JON YOU MADMAN! This is amazing

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So atmospheric and immersive! Excellent job, and I can't wait to read more!

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Is there more to come? I want to know what all of this is. Great hooks. I can't wait to see more if you do.

Man, I wanna write like this where it makes you want more. Love the Beatrix Potter mentioneds! Those were a part of my childhood. I need to get those, I've been collecting my childhood books and I've got a decent collection.

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Thank you! Yes, I’m working on episode 2 now. I’m trying to weave in Easter eggs from other entries. I don’t want to interrupt their flow, but I want to hint at their worlds!

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Sounds great!

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Looking forward to seeing where this goes. I've been too busy to dig into to all the other Blackwater content, but this is a promising start. Hoping to get my own entry out there, too.

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Ooh, this is a very intriguing beginning!

I'm definitely interested in participating, BTW, although it might take me a bit to pull anything together.

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This was SO good! The rabbits, the boy... My imagination is running wild! Can't wait for Part II.

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Thank you! :)

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This was fascinating! I might get in on this as well…

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Do ittttt

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Ok that was pretty creepy, great job! I kept waiting for Jack to be snapped up by some monster; an imposter dealt with.

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I love this so much!! Such a great introduction to Blackwater. I’m in awe of all the details and imagery you used, and how you wore them in so naturally and consistently. This gives me so many ideas, and I can’t wait to see where all the contributions take the lore!

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Thank you so much for the support! I really enjoyed your Suff entry, so I hope you get the chance to put something out soon! I’ll put out a link with everyone’s entry as they come in, so we can all stay up to date!

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